Tuning into an unknown frequency,
Chords never struck before,
Beguile us into a realm unchartered.
Moist eyes, yours and mine.
Blaring horns, condescending cold glares size us up,
Arching eyebrows,
Open Secrets never to be told,
Forgiveness never to be sought,
Our soul leading us on.
Shame, we refuse to do penance for
For laws we believe, conflict with that of the world.
Moist eyes, arching eyebrows
Our soul, for which we refuse to do penance for.
12 comments:
"For laws we believe, conflict with that of the world."
This was beautiful :)
very well written Gul.. i'm still reading it line-by-line!! :-)
Thank you. It's good to see your poetry again. I like the way that the repetition of "moist eyes", "arching eyebrows" and "refuse to do penance" hold the piece together and give a feeling of constancy.
floots- great to have a poet comment on my attempts at poetry, thank you.
sen - the sadu liked alison krauss as well :)
confuzzled- thanks, makes me wonder if perhaps you personally identify with that line?
saurabh-hehe... thank you :)
This blogging thing is really weird.. I'm really new to it (duh !!.. which is PROBABLY why I still think its weird..)..
coz I dunno who/what/why you are.. but I spent the better part of my afternoon..reading almost ALL your blogs..
I'm addicted to your page.. and I dunno why.. but I feel like I wanna meet your parents..
Its a small world.. maybe someday I will..
(Damn I use too many ellipses for my own good... )
hey Gul! it's been a week.. no posts.. should i start the 'teasing' again?!! ;-))
that was beautiful. but it also burns inside
c.i. - blogs are wierd for sure, personally i think blogging has the ability of becoming an integral part of life...it sure has for me..even though i'm one of the less frequent bloggers. why i am.. hehe...wonder quite often about that actually :) meet my parents!! lol, a lot of different people have reacted to my blogs in different ways, but this has got to be a first! can't help wondering why you felt that..
saurabh.... im stuck in the middle of exams once again! i have verses written on papers lying around... just havent had the time to blog! :( will try posting one right now..
ailyn- nice to know when people understand the feelings beneath the words... :)
Well... I get the impression that the-person-that-you-are probably has a lot to do with the way your parents brought you up.. Hence the interest..
Again, this 'conjecture' is based solely on my (mis?)understanding of the contents of your blog.. ;)
Also I haven't had a life as eventful..(emotionally..) as yours.. but I feel I can relate to some of the less-significant-events you've blogged about.. Even a novel is more fun to read when you can relate to one particular character in it.. and here I'm reading about real life.. i'm sure you can empathize with my interest..
I dunno what else to say about you/your writing/your blogs.. I think your friends are already doing enough justice to that !! ;)
c.i.- true, most of my favourite novels have been where i could relate to the characters at some level... and parents, yup i guess i am all that i am largely because of them, very true as well. :) glad you found my blog an interesting read :)
kinda scary though too gul.
ailyn - you bet it is... i basically let out everyting i was scared of in this poem..not everything, but still things that were bugging me, were not letting me live the way i want to... actually there are more things im scared of.. will take another few verses to get them all out of my system... in good time :)
dont worry, its just stuff at the back of my head- doesnt bother me much :)
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